编者推荐:此文语句有亮点。如‘电线上的麻雀音符般起起落落’,‘我的梦才会长出翅膀’,‘燕子相互依偎,其乐融融’,‘否则,我们未来的生活,会充满祭拜者的哀乐,不仅为鸟而悼……’。以鸟作为环保主旨的载体的愿望,很好。但是,未能将载体的具象集中展现。 Editor’s Recommendation: There are bright spots in this sentence. As ’sparrows on electric wires rise and fall like a song,’ ’My dreams will grow wings’, ’Swallows nestled in each other, and they enjoyed each other’. ’Otherwise, our future lives will be full of the mourning and joy of the worshipers, not only Bird and oh...’. The desire to use birds as the carrier of environmental protection is very good. However, it has not been able to focus on the representation of the carrier.