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【栏目要求】
1. 将学生习作根据中考分值给出成绩; 2. 在应该修改的地方划线并标注序号;
3. 根据所标序号进行修改并说明修改的理由; 4. 给学生习作点评优点与不足;
5. 请点评名师提供简历一份，包括：学校、职务、 职称、荣誉、教研教学成果、照片一张。
来稿请寄： 430079 华中师范大学外国语学院《中学生英语》 杂志社 初中部 收
E-mail: [email protected]
本期点评名师
曾烷丽 女， 湖南省洞口县城关中学优秀英语教师，从事教育工作8年。认真钻研教材教法，紧跟时代，大胆创新，教法新颖，在教育教学工作中取得了突出的成绩。所撰写的论文有一篇在国家级刊物上发表，有多篇在省级刊物上发表；指导学生在各类竞赛中取得了不错的成绩，其中多人获得省级奖和地市级奖。
A Letter to John
Dear John,
I got my report card today. I got very nervous when I saw the envelope from school in the mail.
However, I did OK in some subjects this time. My math teacher said that I was hard-working. My parents and I was① happy. But my history result was disappointing. My history teacher said I can② do better. That’s not so good. The most terrible result was science. My science teacher said I was lazy. I didn’t think so. I think science is very difficult. My mother said I would have to try harder at science. My spanish③ teacher said I was good at speak④. That was excellent. How was you⑤ report?
Please write to me soon.
Scott
湖南省洞口县城关中学八年级109班 石文敏
点评
1. 优点：
对于八年级学生来说，这是一篇不错的习作。本文结构严谨，层次分明，介绍了Scott的各科学习成绩，过渡自然。
2. 需要修改的地方：
① was改为were。主语是my parents and I，所以谓语动词要用复数形式。
② can改为could。主句的动词是一般过去时态，从句要与其保持一致。
③ spanish改为Spanish。专有名词的第一个字母要用大写。
④ speak改为speaking。be good at后面接动词的-ing形式。
⑤ you改为your。此处应该使用形容词性的物主代词。
3. 评分：
按照中考英语作文满分15分的评分标准，本文修改前可得12分。
1. 将学生习作根据中考分值给出成绩; 2. 在应该修改的地方划线并标注序号;
3. 根据所标序号进行修改并说明修改的理由; 4. 给学生习作点评优点与不足;
5. 请点评名师提供简历一份，包括：学校、职务、 职称、荣誉、教研教学成果、照片一张。
来稿请寄： 430079 华中师范大学外国语学院《中学生英语》 杂志社 初中部 收
E-mail: [email protected]
本期点评名师
曾烷丽 女， 湖南省洞口县城关中学优秀英语教师，从事教育工作8年。认真钻研教材教法，紧跟时代，大胆创新，教法新颖，在教育教学工作中取得了突出的成绩。所撰写的论文有一篇在国家级刊物上发表，有多篇在省级刊物上发表；指导学生在各类竞赛中取得了不错的成绩，其中多人获得省级奖和地市级奖。
A Letter to John
Dear John,
I got my report card today. I got very nervous when I saw the envelope from school in the mail.
However, I did OK in some subjects this time. My math teacher said that I was hard-working. My parents and I was① happy. But my history result was disappointing. My history teacher said I can② do better. That’s not so good. The most terrible result was science. My science teacher said I was lazy. I didn’t think so. I think science is very difficult. My mother said I would have to try harder at science. My spanish③ teacher said I was good at speak④. That was excellent. How was you⑤ report?
Please write to me soon.
Scott
湖南省洞口县城关中学八年级109班 石文敏
点评
1. 优点：
对于八年级学生来说，这是一篇不错的习作。本文结构严谨，层次分明，介绍了Scott的各科学习成绩，过渡自然。
2. 需要修改的地方：
① was改为were。主语是my parents and I，所以谓语动词要用复数形式。
② can改为could。主句的动词是一般过去时态，从句要与其保持一致。
③ spanish改为Spanish。专有名词的第一个字母要用大写。
④ speak改为speaking。be good at后面接动词的-ing形式。
⑤ you改为your。此处应该使用形容词性的物主代词。
3. 评分：
按照中考英语作文满分15分的评分标准，本文修改前可得12分。