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【栏目要求】
1. 将学生习作根据中考分值给出成绩； 2. 在应该修改的地方划线并标注序号；
3. 根据所标序号进行修改并说明修改的理由； 4. 给学生习作点评<优点与不足>；
5. 请点评名师提供简历一份，包括：学校、职务、 职称、荣誉、教研教学成果、照片一张。
投稿邮箱： [email protected]或[email protected]
来稿请寄： 430079 华中师范大学外国语学院《中学生英语》 杂志社 收
The Spirit of Lei Feng
People all over China are learning from Lei Feng now. He is a great example to all of us. He was always ready to help other① and never asked for anything.
We should learn from him and try helping② others. I will do my best to help others. First， I will study hard so that I can have more abilities to help others. Second， I will help the poor children， such as giving them books and warm clothes， raising money for charities and so on. And on weekends， I am going to visit the old people. Finally， I will help my parents with housework at home. I hope I can do better in the future and help more people.
江苏省赣榆县罗阳中学七（5）班 许晴
1. 优点：
本文小作者巧妙地使用first， second， and和finally将要做的几件事连接起来，使文章条理清晰。文章最后一句，自然点题，对文章中心起到升华的作用。
2. 需要修改的地方：
① other改为others。此处other表示“其他的人或事”，根据句意应用复数形式；
② helping改为to help。try to do sth.意为“尽全力做某事”，try doing sth.意为“试着做某事”。
3. 评分：
按江苏省连云港市中考英语作文满分20分的评分标准，本文修改前可得18分。
1. 将学生习作根据中考分值给出成绩； 2. 在应该修改的地方划线并标注序号；
3. 根据所标序号进行修改并说明修改的理由； 4. 给学生习作点评<优点与不足>；
5. 请点评名师提供简历一份，包括：学校、职务、 职称、荣誉、教研教学成果、照片一张。
投稿邮箱： [email protected]或[email protected]
来稿请寄： 430079 华中师范大学外国语学院《中学生英语》 杂志社 收
The Spirit of Lei Feng
People all over China are learning from Lei Feng now. He is a great example to all of us. He was always ready to help other① and never asked for anything.
We should learn from him and try helping② others. I will do my best to help others. First， I will study hard so that I can have more abilities to help others. Second， I will help the poor children， such as giving them books and warm clothes， raising money for charities and so on. And on weekends， I am going to visit the old people. Finally， I will help my parents with housework at home. I hope I can do better in the future and help more people.
江苏省赣榆县罗阳中学七（5）班 许晴
1. 优点：
本文小作者巧妙地使用first， second， and和finally将要做的几件事连接起来，使文章条理清晰。文章最后一句，自然点题，对文章中心起到升华的作用。
2. 需要修改的地方：
① other改为others。此处other表示“其他的人或事”，根据句意应用复数形式；
② helping改为to help。try to do sth.意为“尽全力做某事”，try doing sth.意为“试着做某事”。
3. 评分：
按江苏省连云港市中考英语作文满分20分的评分标准，本文修改前可得18分。