那是10年前,我教四年级时,班上转来一位名叫杨军的学生。因为他来自一所偏僻的乡村小学,所以作文水平很差,对作文也不感兴趣。可有一次,在写一个小动物的作文时,他文中的一段话却使我眼前一亮:“我家的小鸡跟我的感情可好啦!每天放学,它们只要一听到我的脚步声,就赶忙从鸡寓里跑出来。”“好一个‘鸡寓’!真了不起,还会用拟人化的手法。”我禁不住拍案叫绝,并在“寓”字下点上了着重号,在旁边加上了批注:“精妙,传神!” That was 10 years ago, when I was in the fourth grade, I transferred a student named Yang Jun in class. Because he came from a remote rural primary school, his composition was poor and his composition was not interested. Once, when writing a small animal's essay, a passage in his text made me shine: “My chickens feel better with me! Everyday after school, they just hear me Sound, quickly rushed out of the chicken in the house. ”“ A good chicken '! Really great, but also use personification. ”I can not help but shoot the case, and in the On the heavy number, next to the addition of the comment: “Exquisite, vivid!”