用“太婆珍藏红叶”载“盼宝岛回归”之情,用“村头土路被宽阔的柏油马路取代”显情意之深。此文还需要升格,删除最后一个自然段;补写——太婆去世后,祖母继续拾红叶;祖母坐轮椅去村头时,由“我”推轮椅。这样,对开头“小时候,我不明白”作正面照应——“盼宝岛回归”。 With “Grandma’s collection of red leaves,” “Planning for the return of the island”, the “village headland road was replaced by a wide asphalt road” with deep feelings. This article also needs to be upgraded to delete the last paragraph of nature; add-write - after the death of her great-grandmother, my grandmother continues to pick up the leaves; when the grandmother is in the wheelchair to go to the village, the “I” pushes the wheelchair. In this way, for the beginning “childhood, I do not understand” for positive care - “ hope for return to the island ”.