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My name is Yang Xiao. I’m twelve years old. I study in Class 11,Grade 1, Wujin Middle School.
I very like English(1) and I’m in charge of English study(英语科代表) in our class. It’s an interesting work(2). Some of my classmates often ask me help(3) them with their English and I always ready(4) to do so. I am never(5) get angry. I’m happy all the day. Often I help my English teacher do many things because he’s very busy. My teacher always say(6) I do a good job and my classmates also say I’m friendly and helpful. I’m glad to hear these good words and I really like this job.
I also like reading all kinds of English books and newspapers. In my eyes, English is fun and useful. I want to be an English teacher when I grow up.
Teacher’s comments(教师点评)
本文是小作者的一张自画像，它从几个方面突出了作者“我”的特点，如：性格温柔、乐于助人、爱好看书。文章简洁，层次较为清楚，富有儿童情趣。下列句子应作适当修改。
(1)将very like English 改为like English very much。very like是中式表达，“非常喜欢”的英语表达应为like…very much。
(2)去掉不定冠词an， work是不可数名词，不能用an修饰，或将work改为job。
(3)在help前加to。ask sb. to do sth.意为“请某人做某事”。
(4)在always前加am。ready是形容词，意为“准备好的”，不能单独作谓语。be ready to do sth.意为“乐于做某事”。
(5)将never前的am去掉。“助動词don’t+实义动词原形”或在实义动词前加never(从来不)构成否定式。
(6)将say改为says。My teacher是第三人称单数，作主语，谓语动词也应用第三人称单数形式says。
Improved writing(修改后文章)
Self Introduction
My name is Yang Xiao. I’m twelve years old. I study in Class 11,Grade 1, Wujin Middle School.
I like English very much and I’m in charge of English study(英语科代表) in our class. It’s interesting work. Some of my classmates often ask me to help them with their English and I am always ready to do so. I never get angry. I’m happy all the day. Often I help my English teacher do many things because he’s very busy. My teacher always says I do a good job and my classmates also say I’m friendly and helpful. I’m glad to hear these good words and I really like this job.
I also like reading all kinds of English books and newspapers. In my eyes, English is fun and useful. I want to be an English teacher when I grow up.
指导教师： 马晓燕
I very like English(1) and I’m in charge of English study(英语科代表) in our class. It’s an interesting work(2). Some of my classmates often ask me help(3) them with their English and I always ready(4) to do so. I am never(5) get angry. I’m happy all the day. Often I help my English teacher do many things because he’s very busy. My teacher always say(6) I do a good job and my classmates also say I’m friendly and helpful. I’m glad to hear these good words and I really like this job.
I also like reading all kinds of English books and newspapers. In my eyes, English is fun and useful. I want to be an English teacher when I grow up.
Teacher’s comments(教师点评)
本文是小作者的一张自画像，它从几个方面突出了作者“我”的特点，如：性格温柔、乐于助人、爱好看书。文章简洁，层次较为清楚，富有儿童情趣。下列句子应作适当修改。
(1)将very like English 改为like English very much。very like是中式表达，“非常喜欢”的英语表达应为like…very much。
(2)去掉不定冠词an， work是不可数名词，不能用an修饰，或将work改为job。
(3)在help前加to。ask sb. to do sth.意为“请某人做某事”。
(4)在always前加am。ready是形容词，意为“准备好的”，不能单独作谓语。be ready to do sth.意为“乐于做某事”。
(5)将never前的am去掉。“助動词don’t+实义动词原形”或在实义动词前加never(从来不)构成否定式。
(6)将say改为says。My teacher是第三人称单数，作主语，谓语动词也应用第三人称单数形式says。
Improved writing(修改后文章)
Self Introduction
My name is Yang Xiao. I’m twelve years old. I study in Class 11,Grade 1, Wujin Middle School.
I like English very much and I’m in charge of English study(英语科代表) in our class. It’s interesting work. Some of my classmates often ask me to help them with their English and I am always ready to do so. I never get angry. I’m happy all the day. Often I help my English teacher do many things because he’s very busy. My teacher always says I do a good job and my classmates also say I’m friendly and helpful. I’m glad to hear these good words and I really like this job.
I also like reading all kinds of English books and newspapers. In my eyes, English is fun and useful. I want to be an English teacher when I grow up.
指导教师： 马晓燕