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Most people like traveling on vacation. Last summer I visited Beijing with my family. We went there by train.
It was hot，so we decided to go to the Water Cube， National Swimming Center， to go swimming. But I could not swim well. So it took me a lot of time to learn. I practiced it hard. To my surprised， I could swim the fastest in my family.
The next day， we went somewhere interesting， such as Tian’anmen Square， the Palace Museum and so on. We took quite a few beautiful photos there.
In the afternoon， we went to many parks. I saw so many kinds of trees and flowers. I felt really excited when I was in the colorful world. For dinner， we ate Beijing Duck. It tasted delicious though the waiting time was a little long.
In one word， Beijing is a beautiful great city. I hope to visit it again.
简评：本文紧紧围绕着“Where did you go on vacation”这一主题展开。文章开头对此次旅行的时间、地点、人物的概括简洁明了；中间叙事部分紧张有序，不乏情趣；结尾表达再游此地的意愿，恰当地抒发了此行的感受。综观全文，一般过去时态运用得当，时间线索清晰、语言质朴、一气呵成。
（指导教师：丁喜娟）
It was hot，so we decided to go to the Water Cube， National Swimming Center， to go swimming. But I could not swim well. So it took me a lot of time to learn. I practiced it hard. To my surprised， I could swim the fastest in my family.
The next day， we went somewhere interesting， such as Tian’anmen Square， the Palace Museum and so on. We took quite a few beautiful photos there.
In the afternoon， we went to many parks. I saw so many kinds of trees and flowers. I felt really excited when I was in the colorful world. For dinner， we ate Beijing Duck. It tasted delicious though the waiting time was a little long.
In one word， Beijing is a beautiful great city. I hope to visit it again.
简评：本文紧紧围绕着“Where did you go on vacation”这一主题展开。文章开头对此次旅行的时间、地点、人物的概括简洁明了；中间叙事部分紧张有序，不乏情趣；结尾表达再游此地的意愿，恰当地抒发了此行的感受。综观全文，一般过去时态运用得当，时间线索清晰、语言质朴、一气呵成。
（指导教师：丁喜娟）