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1. 将学生习作根据中考分值给出成绩； 2. 在应该修改的地方划线并标注序号；
3. 根据所标序号进行修改并说明修改的理由； 4. 给学生习作点评<优点与不足>；
5. 请点评名师提供简历一份，包括：学校、职务、 职称、荣誉、教研教学成果、照片一张。
来稿请寄： 430079 华中师范大学外国语学院《中学生英语》 杂志社 编辑部 收
本期点评名师
姜经志 男，中学英语高级教师、安徽省骨干教师、淮北市优秀教师、中国外语学习研究会会员、《中学生英语》特约编委、《学英语》和《英语周报》特约编辑。多年来，在省级以上报刊发表文章800余篇，并有多篇论文获奖；曾主编《初中生英语满分作文大全》、《英语奥林匹克》、《新目标英语八年级暑假作业》，参编《高中英语知识点反馈与阅读》、《初中英语题典大全》、《21世纪英语学习指南》等；多次辅导学生在国家和省级英语竞赛中获奖。
Fishing
It was the first day of summer holidays. I wanted to have a good sleep. But my father woke me up very early. I got a little angry. “What do you want to do？” I asked him. “I want to take you to go fishing，” he answered. I became angry① because I didn’t like fishing at all. But I still went fishing with him. It took us about an hour to the lake②. Father began to teach me how to fish in the lake. An hour later， I didn’t catch one fish. I didn’t want to fish any more.
But no one played with me. I was alone and sat on the ground. I looked around. The sky was blue. The trees were green. The lake water was clear. How beautiful they were！
I became very pleased. Suddenly I thought③ a story about “A little cat goes fishing”. I ran back to fish patient④ again.
When it was going to dark⑤， I caught a lot of fish. I was very happy. How interesting it was！ I really enjoyed fishing.
“Fishing is a very good sport，” now I know. Don’t you want to have a go？
安徽省濉溪县四铺中心学校九（3）班 丁世玉
1. 优点：
文章立意新颖，注重心理变化过程的描写，特别是结尾部分较好，紧扣主题，谈到了第一次钓鱼的心理变化和感受，以及对钓鱼这项活动的真正认识。
2. 需要修改的地方：
① angry应改为angrier。根据上下文，此处应用比较级形式angrier，表示“更生气了”。
② to the lake应改为to reach the lake。It takes sb. some time to do sth. 是固定句型，意为“花费某人多少时间做某事”，to后面应接动词不定式短语。
③ thought应改为thought of或remembered。thought表示“认为”，在这里必须用thought of或remembered来表示“想起，记起”。
④ patient应改为patiently。修饰动词fish需要用副词形式patiently。
⑤ dark应改为be/ get dark。dark 是形容词，前面需加系动词be或get。
3. 评分：
按中考英语作文满分20分的标准，本文修改前可得17分。
1. 将学生习作根据中考分值给出成绩； 2. 在应该修改的地方划线并标注序号；
3. 根据所标序号进行修改并说明修改的理由； 4. 给学生习作点评<优点与不足>；
5. 请点评名师提供简历一份，包括：学校、职务、 职称、荣誉、教研教学成果、照片一张。
来稿请寄： 430079 华中师范大学外国语学院《中学生英语》 杂志社 编辑部 收
本期点评名师
姜经志 男，中学英语高级教师、安徽省骨干教师、淮北市优秀教师、中国外语学习研究会会员、《中学生英语》特约编委、《学英语》和《英语周报》特约编辑。多年来，在省级以上报刊发表文章800余篇，并有多篇论文获奖；曾主编《初中生英语满分作文大全》、《英语奥林匹克》、《新目标英语八年级暑假作业》，参编《高中英语知识点反馈与阅读》、《初中英语题典大全》、《21世纪英语学习指南》等；多次辅导学生在国家和省级英语竞赛中获奖。
Fishing
It was the first day of summer holidays. I wanted to have a good sleep. But my father woke me up very early. I got a little angry. “What do you want to do？” I asked him. “I want to take you to go fishing，” he answered. I became angry① because I didn’t like fishing at all. But I still went fishing with him. It took us about an hour to the lake②. Father began to teach me how to fish in the lake. An hour later， I didn’t catch one fish. I didn’t want to fish any more.
But no one played with me. I was alone and sat on the ground. I looked around. The sky was blue. The trees were green. The lake water was clear. How beautiful they were！
I became very pleased. Suddenly I thought③ a story about “A little cat goes fishing”. I ran back to fish patient④ again.
When it was going to dark⑤， I caught a lot of fish. I was very happy. How interesting it was！ I really enjoyed fishing.
“Fishing is a very good sport，” now I know. Don’t you want to have a go？
安徽省濉溪县四铺中心学校九（3）班 丁世玉
1. 优点：
文章立意新颖，注重心理变化过程的描写，特别是结尾部分较好，紧扣主题，谈到了第一次钓鱼的心理变化和感受，以及对钓鱼这项活动的真正认识。
2. 需要修改的地方：
① angry应改为angrier。根据上下文，此处应用比较级形式angrier，表示“更生气了”。
② to the lake应改为to reach the lake。It takes sb. some time to do sth. 是固定句型，意为“花费某人多少时间做某事”，to后面应接动词不定式短语。
③ thought应改为thought of或remembered。thought表示“认为”，在这里必须用thought of或remembered来表示“想起，记起”。
④ patient应改为patiently。修饰动词fish需要用副词形式patiently。
⑤ dark应改为be/ get dark。dark 是形容词，前面需加系动词be或get。
3. 评分：
按中考英语作文满分20分的标准，本文修改前可得17分。