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Dear Linda,
Long time no see! I miss you very much.
I am taller and healthier now than I was two years ago. I spend less time playing the computer games. Most of the time, I read and study. It helps me to get better grades. I also made many new friends because I am more outgoing now than before.
I will live every day of my life with absolute passion. How about you? Please reply to me as quickly as possible. Give me a visit if you are free.
Yours
Alice
彭小雙老师点评:这篇文章的主题是以书信的格式比较现在的自己和两年前的变化,重点练习比较状语从句。作者立意明确,从学习和交友两个方面来描述了自己的变化,书信格式也很工整。但老师认为还可以从课外生活这方面来补充描述,并利用更多复合句来补充句子的定状补成分,让句子更加丰盈。
范文:
Dear Linda,
Long time no see! How is everything going with you? I am very happy to share something about my new school life with you.
I am taller and healthier than I was two years ago. In order to get better grades, I spend less time playing computer games. Most of the time, I read books and write stories, which can make my life easier later. Of course, I also play sports three times a week after class, to improve the physical and mental health. What’s more, I have more friends now because I am more outgoing and more friendly than before.
I will live every day to the fullest and I really enjoy my school life. How about your? If you are available, I hope we can play together this autumn.
I look forward to hearing from you.
Yours
Alice
Long time no see! I miss you very much.
I am taller and healthier now than I was two years ago. I spend less time playing the computer games. Most of the time, I read and study. It helps me to get better grades. I also made many new friends because I am more outgoing now than before.
I will live every day of my life with absolute passion. How about you? Please reply to me as quickly as possible. Give me a visit if you are free.
Yours
Alice
彭小雙老师点评:这篇文章的主题是以书信的格式比较现在的自己和两年前的变化,重点练习比较状语从句。作者立意明确,从学习和交友两个方面来描述了自己的变化,书信格式也很工整。但老师认为还可以从课外生活这方面来补充描述,并利用更多复合句来补充句子的定状补成分,让句子更加丰盈。
范文:
Dear Linda,
Long time no see! How is everything going with you? I am very happy to share something about my new school life with you.
I am taller and healthier than I was two years ago. In order to get better grades, I spend less time playing computer games. Most of the time, I read books and write stories, which can make my life easier later. Of course, I also play sports three times a week after class, to improve the physical and mental health. What’s more, I have more friends now because I am more outgoing and more friendly than before.
I will live every day to the fullest and I really enjoy my school life. How about your? If you are available, I hope we can play together this autumn.
I look forward to hearing from you.
Yours
Alice