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在指导学生写作时，笔者了解到学生在英语写作方面的困惑：写作不能突破传统写作模式，未能在写作方面取得高分。在批阅过无数份学生英语作文，尝试过许多写作指导方法之后，经过认真反思和总结，笔者归纳总结得出了“3L (Layout, Linking, Literate)”英语写作模式。
二、Linking (承上启下——前后连贯)
连接词包括表示时间、顺序、解释说明、罗列、增加、转折、并列、因果、条件、让步等关系的连词或连接性副词或词组。巧用连接词，能使文章结构紧凑，行文流畅，层次分明，条理清楚，反映出作者对文章的思考是全面清晰的。以下是一个学生写My Perfect School的习作，请仔细体会其中划了线的连接词语：
My Perfect School
My perfect school would be in the center of the city near a big park so that we could go there after lunch to relax. The school would have basketball courts, volleyball courts and a football field. There would also be computers in all the classrooms. Another thing it would have is a language lab where we could have our English classes.
We would study all the school subjects such as Chinese, maths, English, physics and chemistry. However, there would also be some new optional subjects, for example, literary appreciation, astronomy, biochemistry, etc.
As well as the subjects on the timetable, there would be many after-school interest groups, such as chess, choir, photography and sports. There would be regular trips to places like museums and art galleries too.
三、Literate (词句推敲——标新立异)
要想获得高分就应在“正确”表达的基础上，注意选择高级词汇，注意句式变换，避免中文式英语，写出自己的特色，写出自己的“亮点”，展示自己英文写作的风采。
1. 使用独特的词句。特别是打破汉语句子结构的束缚而重组的句子更能增加文章的震撼力。
[例1]唐山曾在20世纪80代发生过一次大地震。
A：There was a strong earthquake in Tangshan in the 1980s.
B：A terrible earthquake hit（struck）Tangshan in the 1980s.
评析：多数同学使用了there be结构，这是正确的。但是，B句却摒弃了常见句式，另辟蹊径，使用了terrible，hit/strike这样的特别词汇，用的是“主语 谓语 宾语”句型。
[例2]你8月15日的来信我今天早晨收到了。
A：I received your letter written on August 15th this morning.
B：Your letter of August 15th reached me this morning.
评析： B句中使用了reach这个拟人化词语，更简洁，更生动。
[例3]这栋房子在芳草街的一栋楼上。
A：The flat is in a building on Fangcao Street.
B：The flat is situated in a building on Fangcao Street. (较高级)
2. 使用强势的句式。如强调句、感叹句、倒装句等，增强语句的表现力。
[例4]阿福救了我妹妹。
A：Ah Fu saved my sister.（一般句式）
B：It was Ah Fu that saved my sister.（强调句式）
[例5]我们看到庄稼和蔬菜长势喜人，很高兴。
A：We were glad to see crops and vegetables growing well.（一般陈述句）
B：How glad we were to see crops and vegetables growing well！（感叹句）
此外，在写作中还必须注意句式的变化，如长短句结合，简单句、并列句与复合句共用，恰当使用独立主格结构、with的复合结构和分词结构等复杂结构。
总之，无论什么文体的文章都需要从这三方面来构思组织。从历年高考书面表达高分文章来看，要想使自己的文章有亮点，吸引读者，在考试中获得高分，都应在结构、段落、用词、造句上下功夫，哪怕有一处“亮点”，都是值得肯定的。
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二、Linking (承上启下——前后连贯)
连接词包括表示时间、顺序、解释说明、罗列、增加、转折、并列、因果、条件、让步等关系的连词或连接性副词或词组。巧用连接词，能使文章结构紧凑，行文流畅，层次分明，条理清楚，反映出作者对文章的思考是全面清晰的。以下是一个学生写My Perfect School的习作，请仔细体会其中划了线的连接词语：
My Perfect School
My perfect school would be in the center of the city near a big park so that we could go there after lunch to relax. The school would have basketball courts, volleyball courts and a football field. There would also be computers in all the classrooms. Another thing it would have is a language lab where we could have our English classes.
We would study all the school subjects such as Chinese, maths, English, physics and chemistry. However, there would also be some new optional subjects, for example, literary appreciation, astronomy, biochemistry, etc.
As well as the subjects on the timetable, there would be many after-school interest groups, such as chess, choir, photography and sports. There would be regular trips to places like museums and art galleries too.
三、Literate (词句推敲——标新立异)
要想获得高分就应在“正确”表达的基础上，注意选择高级词汇，注意句式变换，避免中文式英语，写出自己的特色，写出自己的“亮点”，展示自己英文写作的风采。
1. 使用独特的词句。特别是打破汉语句子结构的束缚而重组的句子更能增加文章的震撼力。
[例1]唐山曾在20世纪80代发生过一次大地震。
A：There was a strong earthquake in Tangshan in the 1980s.
B：A terrible earthquake hit（struck）Tangshan in the 1980s.
评析：多数同学使用了there be结构，这是正确的。但是，B句却摒弃了常见句式，另辟蹊径，使用了terrible，hit/strike这样的特别词汇，用的是“主语 谓语 宾语”句型。
[例2]你8月15日的来信我今天早晨收到了。
A：I received your letter written on August 15th this morning.
B：Your letter of August 15th reached me this morning.
评析： B句中使用了reach这个拟人化词语，更简洁，更生动。
[例3]这栋房子在芳草街的一栋楼上。
A：The flat is in a building on Fangcao Street.
B：The flat is situated in a building on Fangcao Street. (较高级)
2. 使用强势的句式。如强调句、感叹句、倒装句等，增强语句的表现力。
[例4]阿福救了我妹妹。
A：Ah Fu saved my sister.（一般句式）
B：It was Ah Fu that saved my sister.（强调句式）
[例5]我们看到庄稼和蔬菜长势喜人，很高兴。
A：We were glad to see crops and vegetables growing well.（一般陈述句）
B：How glad we were to see crops and vegetables growing well！（感叹句）
此外，在写作中还必须注意句式的变化，如长短句结合，简单句、并列句与复合句共用，恰当使用独立主格结构、with的复合结构和分词结构等复杂结构。
总之，无论什么文体的文章都需要从这三方面来构思组织。从历年高考书面表达高分文章来看，要想使自己的文章有亮点，吸引读者，在考试中获得高分，都应在结构、段落、用词、造句上下功夫，哪怕有一处“亮点”，都是值得肯定的。
责任编校 蒋小青