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2017年的高考即将到来，针对最令同学们头疼的书面表达，我们给出了五个范例。
[范例Ⅰ][顺承自然，过渡流畅]
（2015·全国卷Ⅰ）
Dear Peter，
I’d like to ask you to write an article for our school’s English newspaper.
The “Foreign Cultures” section in our newspaper is very popular among us students. It carries articles written by foreign friends about the cultures of their home countries. Would you please write something about the culture in your part of the United States？ And we would especially welcome articles about how Americans spend their holidays and festivals， and the life of American high school students. You can write anything relevant so long as it’s interesting and informative. 400 words would be fine. Could we have your article before June 28？
I’m looking forward to hearing from you.
Yours，
Li Hua
點评 一般说来，英语作文要逻辑清晰，衔接紧凑，这主要通过衔接词的使用实现。但衔接词语使用过多，又会使文章显得不够简洁。纵观本文，主要是使用简单结构，搭配并列句和部分从句。尽管用的衔接词语不多，但并未觉得条理不清，结构不明。相反，读此文给人以一气呵成之感，其中的奥妙就在于文中虽然大量使用简单句，但通过对简单句式加以润色和修饰，如文中第二句It carries articles written by foreign friends about the cultures of their home countries，句子主干部分为It carries articles，在此基础上再加上written by foreign friends about ...等成分进行拓展，很好地将题目的要求表达出来之余，还能与后文中的the alture in your part of the Unlted States对照，从而实现文章内容的完美衔接。
[范例Ⅱ][长短交替，错落有致]
（2016·全国卷丙卷）
Dear Bob，
I’m sorry to say that I cannot go to the bookstore with you on Friday afternoon. I have just found that I have to attend an important class meeting that afternoon. I hope the change will not cause you too much trouble.
Shall we go on Saturday morning？ We can set out early so that we’ll have more time to read and select books. If it’s convenient for you， let’s meet at 8：30 outside the school gate. If not， let me know what time suits you best. I should be available any time after school next week.
Yours，
Li Hua
点评 在写作当中，为了增强文章的节奏感和可读性，可以交替使用长短句、简单句和复合句。而且多样化的句式能够显示出作者的语言基本功，达到提升作文评分等级的目的。范文的内容包括了所有要点，而且做到了语意连贯。文中使用了宾语从句that I have to attend an important class meeting that afternoon和the change will not cause you too much trouble，目的状语从句so that we’ll have more time to read and select books，条件句If it’s convenient for you，省略句If not等。长短句结合形成呼应，使内容更加丰富。
[范例Ⅲ][难易相间，层次感强]
（2016·江苏卷）
On-line voting becomes increasingly popular， and many competitions get people involved in it. It is beneficial to some people， while it puts others into a dilemma over whether to vote or not.
In my opinion， on-line voting is an inseparable part of modern life and should be welcomed， since it is no more than a way to participate in public life. It makes no difference from ordinary voting events， in which candidates go around to seek supports. In addition， the Internet makes surveying and voting easy and convenient， regardless of time and space. Furthermore， voting on the Internet makes instant feedback possible. To be honest， voters sometimes feel annoyed， not because they hate voting， but because they are divided between emotion and fairness. Things will turn for the better if we can work out some participation rules for people to obey. Therefore， I hold a positive attitude towards on-line voting.
點评 范文很好地完成了所有任务。第一段提出网络投票很流行，给人们带来好处，同时也有不利之处；第二段给出个人观点和理由，观点明确，论据有力；第三段提出了合理的建议。
从写作技巧来看，文章中使用了较多的复合句，如定语从句... in which candidates go around to seek supports，状语从句... if we can work out some participation rules for people to obey等，搭配使用简单句，从而使文章结构合理，层次分明。
文中衔接词的运用较为合理，如in my opinion，in addition，furthermore，to be honest等。
全文语言地道，时态和人称运用准确无误，体现出很强的语言运用能力。
[范例Ⅳ][简洁明了，紧扣文题]
（2015·北京卷）
Dear Jim，
I’m writing to tell you my exciting plan for the summer holiday. I want to join a Dragon Boat Training Camp. I wonder if you’d like to go with me.
This camp will open on July 20， It offers teenagers like you and me a chance to enjoy sports and learn about Chinese culture. If you are interested in it， let me know and I’ll send you more information.
Hope to meet you at the training camp this summer.
Yours，
Li Hua
点评 不少体裁，如书信、电子邮件等，应突出其交际作用，行文应以简洁明了为上。此时若大量使用复杂结构，往往给人以烦冗之感。本文作为一封电子邮件，在简洁明了方面做得很好，寥寥数句就清楚无误地传达了文题的要点。
[范例Ⅴ][表情达意，生动形象]
（2015·重庆卷）
Were I three years younger than I am now， I would strongly recommend that I set more practical and specific goals. As an old saying goes， living without a clear and achievable aim is like sailing without a compass. Compared with many abstract objectives， practical ones can bring us more courage and confidence whenever we make one step forward. If only I could go back and reset my goals.
点评 本文中living without a clear and achievable aim is like sailing without a compass.这一句尽管结构并不复杂，属于“主—系—表”结构，但该句采用了比喻这一修辞手法，将无目标的生活比作无指南针的航海，顿时使人生目标形象起来。
[范例Ⅰ][顺承自然，过渡流畅]
（2015·全国卷Ⅰ）
Dear Peter，
I’d like to ask you to write an article for our school’s English newspaper.
The “Foreign Cultures” section in our newspaper is very popular among us students. It carries articles written by foreign friends about the cultures of their home countries. Would you please write something about the culture in your part of the United States？ And we would especially welcome articles about how Americans spend their holidays and festivals， and the life of American high school students. You can write anything relevant so long as it’s interesting and informative. 400 words would be fine. Could we have your article before June 28？
I’m looking forward to hearing from you.
Yours，
Li Hua
點评 一般说来，英语作文要逻辑清晰，衔接紧凑，这主要通过衔接词的使用实现。但衔接词语使用过多，又会使文章显得不够简洁。纵观本文，主要是使用简单结构，搭配并列句和部分从句。尽管用的衔接词语不多，但并未觉得条理不清，结构不明。相反，读此文给人以一气呵成之感，其中的奥妙就在于文中虽然大量使用简单句，但通过对简单句式加以润色和修饰，如文中第二句It carries articles written by foreign friends about the cultures of their home countries，句子主干部分为It carries articles，在此基础上再加上written by foreign friends about ...等成分进行拓展，很好地将题目的要求表达出来之余，还能与后文中的the alture in your part of the Unlted States对照，从而实现文章内容的完美衔接。
[范例Ⅱ][长短交替，错落有致]
（2016·全国卷丙卷）
Dear Bob，
I’m sorry to say that I cannot go to the bookstore with you on Friday afternoon. I have just found that I have to attend an important class meeting that afternoon. I hope the change will not cause you too much trouble.
Shall we go on Saturday morning？ We can set out early so that we’ll have more time to read and select books. If it’s convenient for you， let’s meet at 8：30 outside the school gate. If not， let me know what time suits you best. I should be available any time after school next week.
Yours，
Li Hua
点评 在写作当中，为了增强文章的节奏感和可读性，可以交替使用长短句、简单句和复合句。而且多样化的句式能够显示出作者的语言基本功，达到提升作文评分等级的目的。范文的内容包括了所有要点，而且做到了语意连贯。文中使用了宾语从句that I have to attend an important class meeting that afternoon和the change will not cause you too much trouble，目的状语从句so that we’ll have more time to read and select books，条件句If it’s convenient for you，省略句If not等。长短句结合形成呼应，使内容更加丰富。
[范例Ⅲ][难易相间，层次感强]
（2016·江苏卷）
On-line voting becomes increasingly popular， and many competitions get people involved in it. It is beneficial to some people， while it puts others into a dilemma over whether to vote or not.
In my opinion， on-line voting is an inseparable part of modern life and should be welcomed， since it is no more than a way to participate in public life. It makes no difference from ordinary voting events， in which candidates go around to seek supports. In addition， the Internet makes surveying and voting easy and convenient， regardless of time and space. Furthermore， voting on the Internet makes instant feedback possible. To be honest， voters sometimes feel annoyed， not because they hate voting， but because they are divided between emotion and fairness. Things will turn for the better if we can work out some participation rules for people to obey. Therefore， I hold a positive attitude towards on-line voting.
點评 范文很好地完成了所有任务。第一段提出网络投票很流行，给人们带来好处，同时也有不利之处；第二段给出个人观点和理由，观点明确，论据有力；第三段提出了合理的建议。
从写作技巧来看，文章中使用了较多的复合句，如定语从句... in which candidates go around to seek supports，状语从句... if we can work out some participation rules for people to obey等，搭配使用简单句，从而使文章结构合理，层次分明。
文中衔接词的运用较为合理，如in my opinion，in addition，furthermore，to be honest等。
全文语言地道，时态和人称运用准确无误，体现出很强的语言运用能力。
[范例Ⅳ][简洁明了，紧扣文题]
（2015·北京卷）
Dear Jim，
I’m writing to tell you my exciting plan for the summer holiday. I want to join a Dragon Boat Training Camp. I wonder if you’d like to go with me.
This camp will open on July 20， It offers teenagers like you and me a chance to enjoy sports and learn about Chinese culture. If you are interested in it， let me know and I’ll send you more information.
Hope to meet you at the training camp this summer.
Yours，
Li Hua
点评 不少体裁，如书信、电子邮件等，应突出其交际作用，行文应以简洁明了为上。此时若大量使用复杂结构，往往给人以烦冗之感。本文作为一封电子邮件，在简洁明了方面做得很好，寥寥数句就清楚无误地传达了文题的要点。
[范例Ⅴ][表情达意，生动形象]
（2015·重庆卷）
Were I three years younger than I am now， I would strongly recommend that I set more practical and specific goals. As an old saying goes， living without a clear and achievable aim is like sailing without a compass. Compared with many abstract objectives， practical ones can bring us more courage and confidence whenever we make one step forward. If only I could go back and reset my goals.
点评 本文中living without a clear and achievable aim is like sailing without a compass.这一句尽管结构并不复杂，属于“主—系—表”结构，但该句采用了比喻这一修辞手法，将无目标的生活比作无指南针的航海，顿时使人生目标形象起来。