“一枚一元的硬币在那里闪着光芒”,写出了一点“亮”;“我看见那枚硬币是收款小姐趁机偷偷地放在上面的”,写出了一线“亮”。亮点是用“恨不得将面前的食物能盯到肚子里去”铺垫出来的。“老板背对着收银台”一笔,使亮点出现合理。此文还需要升格:补充新的情节——老板心知肚明收银员做了“手脚”,但他既放过了收银员也放过了小孩——进而写出一片“亮”。标题宜改为“闪光的硬币”——标题宜实,结语可虚。 “A dollar coin shines there” and writes a bit of “brightness”; “I saw that the coin was collected by a cash collection lady who took the opportunity to sneak up on it,” and wrote a line “bright.” The bright spot is paved with “Wish to wait for the food in front of you to be in your stomach.” “The boss is back to the cashier” a sum of money, so that the bright spots appear reasonable. This article also needs upgrading: to add new plots - the boss knew that the cashier had done “hands and feet”, but he had let go of the cashier and let go of the children - and wrote a “bright.” The title should be changed to “Glittering Coin” - the title should be correct and the conclusions can be false.