构建意象——用“在沙漠中寻找绿洲”承载“坚持信念”的主旨。叙事一波三折——先有“地上白骨”,后有“烈日灼烤”,还有“海市蜃楼”——最终“风带来了潺潺流水声”,“旅者双脚触到柔软的草地”。此文还需要升格:增补“在沙漠中寻找绿洲”的行动描写。 Constructing Images - Using the theme “Looking for an Oasis in the Desert” carries the thrust of “Consistency”. The narrative twists and turns - first “bone on the ground”, followed by “burning sunburn,” and “mirage” - eventually “wind brings turbulent water”, “traveler’s feet touch the soft grass.” This article also needs to be upgraded: to add a description of the action “finding an oasis in the desert.”