王臣:读到你的文章,我眼前很是一亮的。中学生的文章,我最怕读两种,偏偏这两种又多。一种是情绪化的。作者想表达的是情感,由于缺乏深思熟虑和有序表达,就显得情绪化了。写同学间的,写老师的,写家人的,或者写个什么事情。情感是要放在心底的。“才下眉头,又上心头”那一套不行,情感放在“心头”就叫表面化。发 Wang Chen: When I read your article, I was very bright. In the middle school students’ articles, I am most afraid of reading two kinds. One is emotional. What the author wants to express is sentiment, which is emotional because of lack of thoughtful and orderly expression. Write classmates, write teachers, write family members, or write something. Emotions are in the bottom of my heart. “Being under the brow, but also on the heart” That does not work, emotion on the “mind” is called superficial. hair