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When we come to this world， we get care and help from many people.Parents give birth to us and cultivate us to grow.Friends are always there to help us. Teachers try to guide us to a better life path. And even strangers also give us a lot of warmth. All of this teaches us to learn to be grateful to others.
As the saying goes， “Only a life lived for others is worth it.” So what is important to us is that we have to remember that we should be grateful to others forever. Besides， I think it is especially important that this is reflected in our actions. For parents， the best gift we can give them is to study hard and make progress every day. At home， we should help them share as much housework as possible. In order to express our love for our parents， we should often chat with them about our progress in learning and so on. For teachers， we should be strict with ourselves. We should take the classes and do the homework assigned by teachers seriously. Study hard and try to be a moral person， and a person who will be useful to society in the future.
As we all know， friends are the wealth of life. We should treat our friends sincerely and always be friendly to them. It is important to learn to cherish the friendship between friends. We should help others.Don？蒺t forget that helping others is also helping ourselves. So for others， especially for strangers， we should be friendly to them. We should offer to give them a hand when they have difficulties. In a word， we are active in helping others and we are grateful to others， to our society.
Thank the world for bringing us light and warmth， and thank the world for giving us a beautiful nature.Thanks to the society for providing us many opportunities for success， and thanks to our homeland for giving us a peaceful place to live.
Always be grateful， and strive to make the world a better place， a more beautiful homeland.
【習作点评】
这是一篇主题为“感恩他人”的学生习作。文章首先写了我们为什么要对父母、老师、朋友甚至陌生人心存感激，然后具体介绍了我们应该怎样做才能将感激之情落实在具体的行动上。文章充满了正能量，给人以人生的教诲与启迪。
全文结构完整，层次清楚，段落划分恰当。尤其是第一、二段的首句和末尾句的相呼应，使得文章结构非常严谨。文中复杂结构和高级词汇的大胆、准确运用，可以看出该学生课余时间一定善于阅读和积累，英语水平相当不错。尤其是结尾两段清一色的祈使句的使用，让文章充满了强烈的感情色彩，震撼人心。谚语、俗话及一些高级句式的运用，提升了文章的档次。
尽管此文句式变化不少，但是略感文章中should一词运用过频，如果能用其他的句型来替换一下，或许给人的感觉会更为舒服、自然。
（指导教师： 舒立萍）
As the saying goes， “Only a life lived for others is worth it.” So what is important to us is that we have to remember that we should be grateful to others forever. Besides， I think it is especially important that this is reflected in our actions. For parents， the best gift we can give them is to study hard and make progress every day. At home， we should help them share as much housework as possible. In order to express our love for our parents， we should often chat with them about our progress in learning and so on. For teachers， we should be strict with ourselves. We should take the classes and do the homework assigned by teachers seriously. Study hard and try to be a moral person， and a person who will be useful to society in the future.
As we all know， friends are the wealth of life. We should treat our friends sincerely and always be friendly to them. It is important to learn to cherish the friendship between friends. We should help others.Don？蒺t forget that helping others is also helping ourselves. So for others， especially for strangers， we should be friendly to them. We should offer to give them a hand when they have difficulties. In a word， we are active in helping others and we are grateful to others， to our society.
Thank the world for bringing us light and warmth， and thank the world for giving us a beautiful nature.Thanks to the society for providing us many opportunities for success， and thanks to our homeland for giving us a peaceful place to live.
Always be grateful， and strive to make the world a better place， a more beautiful homeland.
【習作点评】
这是一篇主题为“感恩他人”的学生习作。文章首先写了我们为什么要对父母、老师、朋友甚至陌生人心存感激，然后具体介绍了我们应该怎样做才能将感激之情落实在具体的行动上。文章充满了正能量，给人以人生的教诲与启迪。
全文结构完整，层次清楚，段落划分恰当。尤其是第一、二段的首句和末尾句的相呼应，使得文章结构非常严谨。文中复杂结构和高级词汇的大胆、准确运用，可以看出该学生课余时间一定善于阅读和积累，英语水平相当不错。尤其是结尾两段清一色的祈使句的使用，让文章充满了强烈的感情色彩，震撼人心。谚语、俗话及一些高级句式的运用，提升了文章的档次。
尽管此文句式变化不少，但是略感文章中should一词运用过频，如果能用其他的句型来替换一下，或许给人的感觉会更为舒服、自然。
（指导教师： 舒立萍）