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Hello, everybody! My name is Liu Li. I’m in Baishan Middle School. All of my classmates and I like one of our teachers very much. She is friendly to us. We all like her class. Can you guess who is she (1)? Oh, she’s my English teacher——Zhang Fang. We often call her “Miss Zhang”. Now, let me introduce Miss Zhang for (2) you.
She is not tall or short. She is thin. She has short hair. I think she likes short hair because short hair is in fashion now. She has two big eyes and a small nose. She often wears red clothes.
Miss Zhang is good to (3) singing. She can also plays (4) the piano very well. She looks very cool. She is very kind to us. In class, she is like our mother. She often reads stories to us in English.
After class she has many things to do. There are always many exercise books on her desk. She has to correct them for us. So she is very busy all day. We learn from her the old saying “No pains, no gains”. But sometimes she plays games with us.
This is our English teacher, a good teacher. We all like her very much.
【点评】
小作者对他们的英语老师进行了比较全面的描述,包括老师的外貌、性格特点以及老师的敬业精神等方面。该习作语言流畅,描述全面,用词也比较准确,但其中也存在几个不足之处,改进后会更好。
1. is she应改为she is。 宾语从句应用陈述语序,即主语在前,谓语在后。 2. for应改为to。 表示“向某人介绍某人”,应用introduce sb to sb, 其中的to不能改为for。 3. to应改为at。 “擅长……”的表达法是“be good at ...”。 at不能改作to。 4. plays应改为play。 can是情态动词,后面应接动词原形。
(指导老师:姜经志)
She is not tall or short. She is thin. She has short hair. I think she likes short hair because short hair is in fashion now. She has two big eyes and a small nose. She often wears red clothes.
Miss Zhang is good to (3) singing. She can also plays (4) the piano very well. She looks very cool. She is very kind to us. In class, she is like our mother. She often reads stories to us in English.
After class she has many things to do. There are always many exercise books on her desk. She has to correct them for us. So she is very busy all day. We learn from her the old saying “No pains, no gains”. But sometimes she plays games with us.
This is our English teacher, a good teacher. We all like her very much.
【点评】
小作者对他们的英语老师进行了比较全面的描述,包括老师的外貌、性格特点以及老师的敬业精神等方面。该习作语言流畅,描述全面,用词也比较准确,但其中也存在几个不足之处,改进后会更好。
1. is she应改为she is。 宾语从句应用陈述语序,即主语在前,谓语在后。 2. for应改为to。 表示“向某人介绍某人”,应用introduce sb to sb, 其中的to不能改为for。 3. to应改为at。 “擅长……”的表达法是“be good at ...”。 at不能改作to。 4. plays应改为play。 can是情态动词,后面应接动词原形。
(指导老师:姜经志)