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某高中进行了一次学生睡眠时间调查,调查结果令人担忧。请你根据调查获得的数据(见统计表),给《中学生天地》(高中学习)的编辑写一封信,分析中学生睡眠时间不足的原因,并提出解决问题的建议。
要求:词数120～150左右(开头已提供,不计入总词数)。
【One Possible Version】
Dear Editor,
I’m now writing to you to express my concerns about sleep time of senior high school students.
Recently a survey was conducted concerning students’ sleeping hours in our school, and the result greatly upsets us.
The survey indicates that sleeping hours of most students, 72%, range between seven and seven plus a half hours at night, while 13% sleep less than 7 hours. Another 10% nearly have enough sleep. And only 5% are the luckiest to have sufficient time to rest. But why’s that?
One cause is that many students are heavily burdened with homework. Another cause lies in the concept that more hours in studies may result in high scores in tests. Occasionally, some students may stay up late participating in time-consuming activities — watching soap operas or playing computer games.
As an old saying goes, a sufficient rest leads to high efficiency. And enough sleep makes healthy and wise men of us. So in my opinion, if parents impose less pressure on their children, teachers assign us less homework and we students learn more efficiently, enough sleep for students will surely be guaranteed and students may live a happier and sunnier life.
【Comments】
This passage is characterized by a clear and compact structure, logical analysis, and appropriate proposal of solutions.
It reads fluently and is significant in coherence due to the writer’s skillful use of cohesive expressions such as But why’s that, occasionally, as an old saying goes, in my opinion, etc.
It also features a flexible application of different grammatical structures. For instance, the adoption of a conditional clause “if parents impose less pressure on their children”, and an appositive clause“that more hours in studies may result in high scores in tests”.
(奉化中学孙夏怡指导老师周道义)
要求:词数120～150左右(开头已提供,不计入总词数)。
【One Possible Version】
Dear Editor,
I’m now writing to you to express my concerns about sleep time of senior high school students.
Recently a survey was conducted concerning students’ sleeping hours in our school, and the result greatly upsets us.
The survey indicates that sleeping hours of most students, 72%, range between seven and seven plus a half hours at night, while 13% sleep less than 7 hours. Another 10% nearly have enough sleep. And only 5% are the luckiest to have sufficient time to rest. But why’s that?
One cause is that many students are heavily burdened with homework. Another cause lies in the concept that more hours in studies may result in high scores in tests. Occasionally, some students may stay up late participating in time-consuming activities — watching soap operas or playing computer games.
As an old saying goes, a sufficient rest leads to high efficiency. And enough sleep makes healthy and wise men of us. So in my opinion, if parents impose less pressure on their children, teachers assign us less homework and we students learn more efficiently, enough sleep for students will surely be guaranteed and students may live a happier and sunnier life.
【Comments】
This passage is characterized by a clear and compact structure, logical analysis, and appropriate proposal of solutions.
It reads fluently and is significant in coherence due to the writer’s skillful use of cohesive expressions such as But why’s that, occasionally, as an old saying goes, in my opinion, etc.
It also features a flexible application of different grammatical structures. For instance, the adoption of a conditional clause “if parents impose less pressure on their children”, and an appositive clause“that more hours in studies may result in high scores in tests”.
(奉化中学孙夏怡指导老师周道义)