丁昌午同学已经是六年级学生了,可是作文最长也不超过二百个字,曾个别指导过好几次,但总觉得进步不大。上学期做了一篇作文,《我的同桌》他是这样写的: 我的同桌是王永成同学,个儿不高,苹果似的脸蛋儿,对人说话常露出一嘴小白牙。王永成是班上能勤奋学习的人,成绩都保持在八十五分以上。能主动地帮助我,昨天就耐心地讲算术给我听。他总能响应老师提出的号召,每天第一个早到校读书。我要学习他的优秀品质,争取做个好学生。这篇文章一百多字,不难看出,丁昌午同学是想对每一个问题选用一些具体事例来说明,但事例写得太简单,如写王永成勤奋学习,仅仅用“保持在八十五分以上”来说明,写他能帮助人,只说了“耐心地讲算术给我听”一句话……文章又短又不生动。照例我又把他喊进了办公室。我指着作文说:“你写王永成能勤奋学习,只用八十五分以上来说明,觉得有些空洞,给人印象不深,而他有很多动人事例可以写,例如有一天晚上 ,学校 Ding Changwu students are already sixth-grade students, but the longest novels are more than two hundred words, had been directed several times, but always felt little progress. Last semester made an essay, “my desk” He wrote this: my classmate is Wang Yongcheng at the same table, a child is not high, Apple-like face children, speak to people often reveal a mouthful of white teeth. Wang Yongcheng is a class who can study hard, the results are maintained at more than eighty-five. Can help me proactively, taught me arithmetic patiently yesterday to listen to me. He can always respond to the call made by the teacher, the first day of school every day to study. I want to learn from his excellent quality and strive to be a good student. This article more than a hundred characters, it is easy to see, Ding Chang afternoon students want to use a few specific examples of each problem to illustrate, but the case is too simple to write, such as write Wang Yongcheng hard-working study, just use “to maintain at 85 ”To illustrate, write he can help people, said only“ patiently told me to learn arithmetic, ”a sentence ... short and vivid article. As usual, I called him into the office again. I pointed to the essay and said: "You write Wang Yongcheng can diligently study, only eighty-five minutes to explain, feel some empty, impressed, and he has a lot of moving examples to write, for example, one night, school