Nowadays，an increasing number of middle school students possess mobile phones，which worries people a lot.There has been a fierce debate on whether middle school students should be allowed to take cellphones with them.
　　When it comes to mobile phones，we must treat them objectively.On the one hand，mobile phones do benefit us .Thanks to them，we can enjoy various information wherever we go，and keep in touch with others however far away we are from them.There is no doubt that mobile phones make our life more convenient and colorful.On the other hand，more and more problems have sprung out，the most serious of which is that some students use mobile phones so frequently that they cause worse performances in their study.As a matter of fact，overuse of mobile phones not only harms our eyes but also influences our mind.It is obvious that we should keep away from the garbage message on the Internet.
　　As far as I’m concerned， we students have access to mobile phones.It is what we use them for that matters most.We must keep the balance between study and entertainment.
　　指導意見：
　　此文结构清晰，从正反两方面论证了中学生用手机的利弊；语言精练，运用了大量亮眼的表达，如when it comes to，spring out，not only...but also，keep the balance between等以及定语从句和强调句型，这对于高一新生来说是难能可贵的一篇优秀习作。
　　作者简介：
　　邵卿洋，就读于湖南省常德市石门县第一中学高636班。
　　（指导老师：汪萍）